Mr_Misanthropy
Practically Family
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- Chicago, Illinois
Thanks Feraud for your advice. I did in fact get rid of the last two paragraphs and replaced them with this conclusion.
"Well made, stylish dress hats are becoming more fashionable, and I'd hate to see your illogical hat policy hinder your business any further. As far as i'm concerned, it's an insult that my wearing a fedora and three piece suit entitled me to be treated as a gang member. I realize you own a private business, and you're entitled to make whatever rules you want, but if this rule isn't modified, I will not be returning. I plan to suggest the same to my friends and business associates as well. Thank you very much for you time taken to read my letter, and I hope we can come to an agreement. Please feel free to contact me anytime if you have any questions or concerns with anything I've put forth in this correspondence."
I think I'll leave the Capone reference, I think it's appropriate. Anyone else say I should ditch the Capone thing? But after reading my letter again (which I wrote at like midnight, so, forgive me) I see I had some bad moves in there. Permission letter... pfft.. what was I thinking. It's me who should give him a permission letter.. TO BREATHE! Just kidding.
Thanks Baggers for the letter advice, I did remove the attorney thing, and I took some of your other suggestions as well, as you can see above. I'm not Latino, however, I don't even look it. Maybe it's the black and white pic? I've actually never heard anyone say that about me before, I kind of had a chuckle. And actually, it was a stingy brim! How'd you know??
Again, thanks for all the help with this letter. I hope it's perfect now, but i'll wait for some more feedback before I send it out just yet.
"Well made, stylish dress hats are becoming more fashionable, and I'd hate to see your illogical hat policy hinder your business any further. As far as i'm concerned, it's an insult that my wearing a fedora and three piece suit entitled me to be treated as a gang member. I realize you own a private business, and you're entitled to make whatever rules you want, but if this rule isn't modified, I will not be returning. I plan to suggest the same to my friends and business associates as well. Thank you very much for you time taken to read my letter, and I hope we can come to an agreement. Please feel free to contact me anytime if you have any questions or concerns with anything I've put forth in this correspondence."
I think I'll leave the Capone reference, I think it's appropriate. Anyone else say I should ditch the Capone thing? But after reading my letter again (which I wrote at like midnight, so, forgive me) I see I had some bad moves in there. Permission letter... pfft.. what was I thinking. It's me who should give him a permission letter.. TO BREATHE! Just kidding.
Baggers said:Well, if I lived nearby, I'd be more than happy to give it a test. I just wonder if the bouncer saw the hat, then the "yoot" under it, stopped there and concluded: "latino gang banger" or something similar (your avatar does seem to indicate a slightly hispanic appearance to me). How he came to that conclusion if you were also wearing a three piece suit...well, let's just say that high levels of intelligence may not be a job requirement for his position. BTW, the fed wasn't a stingy brim, was it? lol Even so, I wonder if they would have allowed Kevin Federline or Johnny Depp to wear their hats if they showed up at the door?
Thanks Baggers for the letter advice, I did remove the attorney thing, and I took some of your other suggestions as well, as you can see above. I'm not Latino, however, I don't even look it. Maybe it's the black and white pic? I've actually never heard anyone say that about me before, I kind of had a chuckle. And actually, it was a stingy brim! How'd you know??
Again, thanks for all the help with this letter. I hope it's perfect now, but i'll wait for some more feedback before I send it out just yet.