I'm afraid the version you see is the last one. Sounds mad, but I basically wrote a 'long version', then cut and re-arranged it until I reached the one you see. I have a couple of roughs my other half read and gave her opinion, but nothing that I'd really want to shareI'm sure we'd all love to read the unabridged version if you can post it here. Not sure if your work would allow it, but I thought it was worth a shot.....![]()